Every Second I think of U..
Every Night I dream about U..
Every Word I speak is to make U happy..
My Every Sacrifice is for U.. !!!
and I promise U..
I'll make ur Every day, a Memorable one..
I'll help U out of ur Miseries..
I'll not leave ur Hand..
I'll try to keep a Smile on Ur face every Moment..
I'll Promise, that my Love for U is forever n Ever..!!!
My Life is no more Mine now..
Its completely filled with U..
My Love!!!
this is the most common feeling in deep love kept it good.....my refinements are 4th line can rime as well as the other 3..it can be like...*every sacrifice i do is for... u*
ReplyDelete8th line lost its beauty.....it can as....*I'll TRY,NOT TO LOOSE UR SMILE....(if im not wrong)
9th line promise can be done now bt used as future tense..*I PROMISE U THAT MY LOVE FOR U IS FOREVER AND EVER*.....
10th line can be ...."now" at the end can be removed
actually tlp after first 4 lines it can end up like **my life is no more mine.....
ReplyDeleteits completely filled with u...my love!!!**
because all the rest is a promise which can be written as next article..with a title "its my promise dear"...then both will have justification with title and feel as well....let me know what u feel about this idea??